P is for Poison

I'm doing flash fiction for this year's A to Z challenge, hope you enjoy!




Poison


“I don’t think we should do this anymore.”
“What do you mean?”
“Us. This. I don’t think we should be together anymore.”
She folded her arms and looked down at her feet.
“Where is this coming from?”
“It’s - nowhere -”
“It’s him, isn’t it? What’s he been telling you this time?”
“It’s nothing to do with him, it’s entirely my decision.”
“Can’t you see he’s poisoned you against me? I can’t believe you’re letting him tear us apart!”
“Maybe we were already poisoned. Maybe he just helped me to see it.”
She turned and walked away, and didn’t look back.

Comments

  1. Tasha Duncan-Drake18 April 2015 at 11:55

    The question I have to ask, was the poison already there and 'he' has a point, or is 'he' just being a controlling arse?
    Tasha
    Tasha's Thinkings | Wittegen Press | FB3X (AC)

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  2. Annalisa Crawford18 April 2015 at 13:22

    He sounds like he has a strong ulterior motive!

    Annalisa, writing A-Z vignettes, at Wake Up, Eat, Write, Sleep

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  3. Sophie Duncan18 April 2015 at 15:05

    He sounds like he's a manipulator, or that just me being paranoid?
    Sophie
    Sophie's Thoughts & Fumbles
    FB3X
    Wittegen Press

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  4. i b arora18 April 2015 at 15:19

    we often react to perceptions and not reality

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  5. jaybird18 April 2015 at 16:37

    Ouch, this sounds like quite a real break up. Great job.

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  6. Jennifer Hawes18 April 2015 at 19:25

    Another great story!

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  7. Susan Gourley/Kelley18 April 2015 at 19:37

    Oh, no. Hard to say if it was poisoned or already bad.

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  8. Deanie Humphrys-Dunne18 April 2015 at 21:56

    Good job, Laura. A very thought-provoking story. Hope you're enjoying the weekend.

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  9. Dixie@dcrelief19 April 2015 at 00:20

    >>..."She folded her arms and looked down at her feet."
    In body language terms, she'd definitely made up her mind,
    Good one,Laura!

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  10. bookworm19 April 2015 at 01:43

    Hope she made the right decision. Good story. Alana rmblinwitham.blogspot.com

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  11. Click19 April 2015 at 11:50

    Another good one, Laura. :-) I love how much of a story you're capturing in so few words.

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  12. Rachel Pattinson19 April 2015 at 18:21

    Powerful story - I wonder which one of them was telling the truth? Were they already poisoned or not? Great writing!

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  13. Haneen Ibrahim19 April 2015 at 20:15

    I LOVE stories in dialogue, this is no exception, honestly one of your strongest along with immortal and Horsemen. Can't wait to see what you have next :)

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