Darkness

I'm doing flash fiction for this year's A to Z challenge, hope you enjoy!




Darkness


David hurried down the street, checking his watch: five minutes until sunset.
“Well, well, well, look who it is.”
David turned slowly to see Kyle and his gang bearing down on him.
“Crap,” he muttered. “Hey, Kyle, now’s not really a good time, it’s getting dark so I’d better be getting home…”
Kyle smirked. “Aren’t you a little old to be afraid of the dark, Davey?” The gang around him tittered.
“I’m not afraid of the dark, I just need to get home before-”
“Before what, Davey? Before the monsters come out?”
David felt the familiar stirring inside him as the sun finally went down.
“Pretty much,” David said, and Kyle’s face twisted in fear as darkness fell around them.

Comments

  1. Sophie Duncan4 April 2015 at 10:13

    Oh, Kyle, Kyle - you picked the wrong person to bully, didn't you!
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  2. Varsha4 April 2015 at 13:04

    Oh my! Did he turn into werewolf or something? Interesting story :)

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  3. Anonymous4 April 2015 at 14:39

    oh thats a good paragraph! what happens???

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  4. Tasha Duncan-Drake4 April 2015 at 15:34

    Well that serves Kyle right doesn't it! I wonder if he will survive to learn the lesson?
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  5. Annalisa Crawford4 April 2015 at 15:35

    Brilliant. Great way to give the bully his comeuppance!

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  6. Rob Z Tobor4 April 2015 at 16:05

    You cant beat a good monster in the dark story.

    Rob Z Tobor

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  7. Alex J. Cavanaugh4 April 2015 at 16:33

    He was the monster! Nice twist. I guess Kyle won't be bothering him anymore.

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  8. Susan Gourley/Kelley4 April 2015 at 17:30

    Sounds great. What id Danny?

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  9. Haneen Ibrahim4 April 2015 at 18:40

    Tsk Tsk ! Kyle you sounded so tough, ah well! he had it coming. Good one :)
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  10. Cortney Pearson4 April 2015 at 19:17

    Lots of emotion in such a short piece! Nice.

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  11. Click4 April 2015 at 19:20

    Oh that's great. I had a funny feeling that was the twist that was coming. It was still a surprise at the end because you leave it to the imagine just what he turns into. :-)

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  12. betty4 April 2015 at 19:23

    Good one! Kyle I think is about to learn a lesson! Have fun with the rest of the challenge!

    betty

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  13. Chrys Fey4 April 2015 at 19:34

    Exciting! I love it when writers utilize the dark. :) I'm also thinking he turned into a werewolf or some other creature.

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  14. L.G. Keltner4 April 2015 at 20:05

    I LOVE this one! Oh Kyle, you think you're so tough, and that arrogance is coming back to bite you!

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  15. Anonymous4 April 2015 at 22:00

    Hi Laura, enjoyed this, i don't think Kyle knows what he is in for :) Modhukori swinging by.

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  16. Cal Dream Squirrel5 April 2015 at 03:17

    Enjoying these so far... great writing... Cheers from a fellow A to Z blogger....

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  17. Ann Bennett5 April 2015 at 03:28

    I have a feeling Kyle and his crew are going to get a rumble they don't expect. Visiting from A to Z.

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  18. Dixie@dcrelief5 April 2015 at 04:12

    Uh-oh, and I can't help but smile. Good post, Laura!

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  19. Bevimus5 April 2015 at 23:07

    Haw-haw! Revenge!

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  20. Rachel Pattinson5 April 2015 at 23:43

    Great story! Really enjoyed reading this - I hope he taught Kyle a lesson!

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  21. Sara C. Snider6 April 2015 at 07:52

    I really like this one--short, but packs a good punch. And sounds like Kyle had it coming. ;)

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  22. May Cho6 April 2015 at 10:34

    "Before the monsters come out." What an provoking phrase!

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  23. Unknown6 April 2015 at 12:52

    Love that twist!

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  24. Jackie6 April 2015 at 15:18

    Great piece, Laura!!!

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  25. i b arora6 April 2015 at 15:45

    quite an unexpected end

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  26. Heather Musk6 April 2015 at 20:52

    Excellent, I hope Kyle and his gang are put off confronting people in the dark. If they survive the night of course ...

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