I is for Immortal

I'm doing flash fiction for this year's A to Z challenge, hope you enjoy!




Immortal

I thought it was a good idea at the time. Who would pass up the chance to be immortal?
But the burden of eternal life is a great one. I've watched countless people die - friends, lovers, family - and not been able to do a thing about it. I can’t do it any more. Meet someone, get close, share everything, then one day they're gone and I'm alone again.
The world continues to spin, life goes on for everyone, except for me.
I may be immortal, but my life was over a long time ago.

Comments

  1. Annalisa Crawford10 April 2015 at 10:39

    I completely thought of the Doctor while I was reading this. I wouldn't be able to handle the loneliness. A thought-provoking post today.

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  2. Sophie Duncan10 April 2015 at 12:37

    This is very sad, but it's similar to thoughts I've had about being immortal - watching everyone around you die, not being able to hold onto anything. After a few hundred years, immortality, if it is isolated immortality, could get 'old'.
    Sophie
    Sophie's Thoughts & Fumbles
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    Wittegen Press

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  3. Keith's Ramblings10 April 2015 at 13:13

    I'm lucky to have friends and family and the thought of losing them terrifies me. Would I rather be alone and be spared the pan? I truly don't know.

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  4. Dani10 April 2015 at 14:08

    Talk about depressing. I'd love to live forever, only to see how the world turns out but then again, I wouldn't want to bury everyone I loved.

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  5. Tasha Duncan-Drake10 April 2015 at 14:14

    So sad - I've always said I'd only say yes to immortality if I could take a certain set of people with me.
    Tasha
    Tasha's Thinkings | Wittegen Press | FB3X (AC)

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  6. Bish Denham10 April 2015 at 15:35

    Yup, I wouldn't want to be immortal. It's a lonely, lonely life. And, after a while, you would have seen/done everything and you'd become jaded, bored, frustrated... UGH!

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  7. S. L. Hennessy10 April 2015 at 16:01

    I love the look here at the link between immortality and the sense of loneliness. Wonderful.

    Good luck with the 2015 A to Z Challenge!
    A to Z Co-Host S. L. Hennessy
    http://pensuasion.blogspot.com

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  8. Alex J. Cavanaugh10 April 2015 at 17:04

    That would be the tragedy of immortality.

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  9. Susan Gourley/Kelley10 April 2015 at 18:16

    It would be very sad to see family and friends age and pass away while you remained the same.

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  10. Haneen Ibrahim10 April 2015 at 19:17

    Strong last line. Don't worry eventually the sun will die and the world will come to an end and so will you.

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  11. Kate Larkindale10 April 2015 at 19:28

    I've always thought immortality must be terribly lonely. I wrote a story once where a vampire ran a euthanasia clinic because he couldn't die, and wanted to help those who wanted to.

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  12. Raesquiggles10 April 2015 at 21:17

    Immortality would only appeal to me if all my friends and family were also immortal, otherwise it would be an agonising life watching everyone depart.

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  13. Dixie@dcrelief10 April 2015 at 22:53

    I've never thought of it negatively. I figure it comes and brings it's own horn of life and love.

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  14. Unknown10 April 2015 at 23:05

    I really liked the way you ended that. It's funny to think of having an extended life-span but no "real life." Well done!

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  15. Jessica Marcarelli10 April 2015 at 23:52

    Ohhh, I love this one. So full in so few words. The meaning and what you left the reader with is really good.

    Jessica
    2015 A to Z Blogger
    Visions of Other Worlds

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  16. B~Natrelle11 April 2015 at 01:10

    Hello there.
    I'm from England too! Thanks for sharing. Just making my way around the challenge.

    Entrepreneurial Goddess

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  17. Click12 April 2015 at 13:47

    That last line carries so much weight. During my OU Creative Writing course I wrote about someone who inadvertently became immortal when they got married and how they dealt with it (by running away). :-)

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