2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest!
So, in a moment of madness on Friday I entered the 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest, although I have very little writing experience. But I thought it would be a good way of getting some!
Here are the rules:
1. Entries must begin with the two words: Lightning flashed.
2. Entries must be 300 words or less and be in prose. I'm not versed enough in poetry verse to judge it properly.
3. Entries must be posted on your blog between May 21 - 23.
4. You must sign up in the linky to have your entry be counted.
If you want to join in, the host of the blogfest is located here: Cherie Reich's blog.
Here is my entry:
Lightning flashed across his face as he stood in the dark bedroom. The weather, which had been restless all night, had finally broken and rain spattered the windows. He looked out into the dark street, drinking in all of the details; the overflowing wheelbarrow in the front garden, the battered Fiesta in the driveway, the flickering orange street lamp. Things he usually cared little about, but knowing that this would be the last time he would see them, he couldn’t look away.
Here are the rules:
1. Entries must begin with the two words: Lightning flashed.
2. Entries must be 300 words or less and be in prose. I'm not versed enough in poetry verse to judge it properly.
3. Entries must be posted on your blog between May 21 - 23.
4. You must sign up in the linky to have your entry be counted.
If you want to join in, the host of the blogfest is located here: Cherie Reich's blog.
Here is my entry:
Lightning flashed across his face as he stood in the dark bedroom. The weather, which had been restless all night, had finally broken and rain spattered the windows. He looked out into the dark street, drinking in all of the details; the overflowing wheelbarrow in the front garden, the battered Fiesta in the driveway, the flickering orange street lamp. Things he usually cared little about, but knowing that this would be the last time he would see them, he couldn’t look away.
Mentally he
shook himself, and turned his attention to the bedroom, his eyes drawn to the
sleeping figure in the bed. She always looked so peaceful while she was
sleeping; he almost changed his mind…almost. Her dark hair was splayed on the
pillow, and he could hear her soft breathing. He pulled the crinkled paper out of
his pocket, and laid it onto the pillow next to her head. She moved restlessly,
as if she subconsciously knew something wasn’t right.
He looked
around the room one last time, trying to fix all of the details permanently to
his memory. A single tear slid down his cheek as he glided down the stairs and
out of the front door, into the stormy night.
Ok, thanks! :)
ReplyDeleteWow. I don't believe you have little writing experience, that was heart wrenching. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I was really nervous about putting it up, you've made me feel better!
DeleteNo probs, it was fantastic.
DeleteI've nominated you for a lovely blog award :) http://strangerthanwriting.blogspot.co.uk/2012/05/sunshine-award.html
You set the mood perfectly, and I felt for the character. Without knowing all of the back story, it can be hard to make someone really feel for a character, but you did it. Great work!
ReplyDeleteThat was beautifully written! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
DeleteGreat job, Laura. Good descriptions of what's going on. I liked how his s.o. is quietly sleeping while a storm is brewing, in more ways than one.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Yes, I think something would be missing if there was no storm :)
DeleteWell done that was excellent, you get my vote..... Not that it will make much difference. You are at 99 followers WELL COOL. I don't think I am likely to get that many followers until 2058
ReplyDeleteThank you! I think you will get more followers, I love your blog, it's unique :)
DeleteWell done!
ReplyDeleteEvalina, This and that...
Very little writing experience?? That was fantastic!
ReplyDeleteSo sad....love to hear the backstory. Sounds like a good mystery lead-in to me. ;-) [Follower #101]
ReplyDeleteThanks for following! And thanks for the kind words :)
DeleteGreat entry, yet so sad :(
ReplyDeleteThis is great. I might (might) try this but only two days to go.
ReplyDeleteThanks! You should try it :)
DeleteGood, ominous build-up of dread...it's so true how, when we're about to face some momentous occasion, we truly see that which has been all around us, all along.
ReplyDeleteSome Dark Romantic
Thanks! It is true, you tend to notice the little, insignificant things more :)
DeleteA good stormy image. Teary, too.
ReplyDeleteWow, that was... really really good. So much emotion behind this one little scene. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow, hurry up and write a book already! That scene was great. I love the descriptions, how they were so different, but called a very clear picture to your mind. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I'm glad you liked it :)
DeleteHello? Amazing. I have goosebumps.
ReplyDeleteFor someone who says they have little experience you sure are a natural then. Very well written and I loved every word!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, I'm glad you liked it! :)
DeleteI'm trying to think of reasons he almost stayed, but didn't. It didn't seem that he was anxious to leave her...ok. Finish the book.
ReplyDeleteYup. I'm, with Donna. I want the whole story. =)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you enjoyed it :)
DeleteWonderful writing. I wonder where he's going and why he's leaving the family he loves.
ReplyDeleteThanks! :)
Delete"he glided down the stairs"
ReplyDeleteI think this is the night he died and he has once last chance to leave something for her to say farewell by.
Loved it. Well done!
I'm glad you liked it! :)
DeleteVery sad scene! Rain is a perfect setting for it.
ReplyDeleteAllison (Geek Banter)
That's what I thought, it sets the scene really well :)
DeleteNicely done. One wouldl only leave their love during a thunderstorm.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I thought it was a great setting :)
DeleteThat was amazing. Is he a secret agent? That would be awesome :P
ReplyDeleteThank you! He's not a secret agent, although that would be a good idea! :)
DeleteBeautiful writing. I really want to know why he was leaving. Sad and touching scene.
ReplyDeleteI'm also curious to know why he had to leave.
ReplyDeleteYou did very well at showing me what went on in his thoughts. :-)
Thanks! I really thought it wasn't very good when I put it up :)
DeleteI was wondering at first if he was going to commit suicide... glad to see him alive but very curious as to the why he left???
ReplyDeleteOh no, I don't know if I'd be able to write about suicide! :)
DeleteAww! I wonder why he’s leaving. How sad! Such a great flash fiction story.
ReplyDeleteI'll announce the finalists tomorrow.
Thanks! It is very sad, I didn't know it was going to be until I started writing :)
Deletecoward or hero? great descriptions!
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