50 word horror story!

Just a short post today, I really need to start planning my posts properly again! It's almost time for Spooktoberfest, I'll probably be posting my entry on Monday. I'm really loving all these Halloween themed blogfests and competitions, they're a lot of fun. :)

I entered a competition the other day which involved writing a horror story in 50 words. It was very hard, it took me a long time because I had to make sure that every word was absolutely necessary. I rushed it a little so it's not brilliant, but here it is:
Taken from here
The seatbelt clicked as the engine roared to life. “It’s time,” growled a voice, and my eyes snapped to the rear-view mirror. Blood red eyes stared back as numbness spread, my limbs beginning to move without my consent. As the car crawled forward the scarlet eyes gleamed, hungry for torment.

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  1. I think your story is great! Writing a 50 word story sounds much easier than it actually is. It's hard to pack that much into such a short narrative, but I think you pulled it off.

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    1. Thank you! It really is so hard, you don't realise how much until you actually try it! It was an interesting exercise though, I might have to try more 50 word pieces.

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  2. For 50 words you've done an incredible job in conveying the pure horror of this story Laura, I really love this post, awesome job!

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    1. Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)

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  3. This is great! The scariness comes from the lack of information - that's how the best horror works, allowing the reader's imagination to run wild. This piece works really well for being so short.

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    1. Thanks! It was hard to write, I'm glad it has a scary effect :)

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  4. great story but it will shorten to . . . . taking mum to the shops today

    ahaahaahahahahah haha hah hah ahhah ahhha

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    1. This made me laugh so hard when I read it, thanks!

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  5. This is great. You got a lot into those fifty words.

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    1. Thank you, it took a lot of shortening!

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  6. Wonderful job with so few words!

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  7. Hi Laura, nice to meet you. Spooky eyes! Great job.
    Nancy

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  8. Writing such short stories is really tough isn't it? you did a great job!

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  9. That must have been hard to condense that story into 50 words. Great job!

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  10. the work paid off, it was very spooky.

    .......dhole

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  11. And that's why I always check the rear seats of my car before I start it.

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    1. Yeah me too, that's actually where the idea came from!

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  12. WOW, you packed a lot of punch into just 50 words! I'm not sure I could've managed to tell a complete story the way you did! I mean, sure, I want to know more, but still...well done! :-)
    Mina's Resurrection Blogfest!

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    1. Thank you very much! It was very hard to do, I'm pretty pleased with how it turned out :)

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